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An Open Call for Feedback (On My Story)
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(I don't normally do this, but if you are reading this posting, please consider sharing it wherever you can. I would really appreciate it, and to be honest, I could use any exposure on this that I can get. Thank you.)

This year I did something completely new for me; I wrote a story. An idea came to me out of nowhere, like ideas often do. But for whatever reason I actually decided to run with it this time. I fleshed out the idea as best as I could, wrote an outline out and then start writing and eventually finished the first draft. Then I went through start to finish and did a full edit.

Over all I think it turned out ok. Way better than I ever expected in fact. My wife has read it and she really enjoyed it, but she is my wife and is therefore extremely biased. Unfortunately I have hit a bit of a wall with my editing; I am having a very hard time deciding what to do next. I’m sure there’s plenty more to be done editing wise but I can’t decide exactly what.

I have tried getting someone else to read it with no luck so far. And not just read it, but provide feedback. So if you are reading this post, and are interested in reading a second draft of my story, please let me know! I would really appreciate any help you can provide. I will provide a link to the first chapter here, but for the rest I will need a google account (gmail address) that I can add to the Google Drive folder where the rest of it is located.

For now, here is some basic information:

Title: The Scars of Gaia
Genre: Fantasy
Word Count: 100k
Chapters: 19 + Epilogue

Story Blurb:

James, a merchant from the nation of the Deice Imperium, lives in one of the poorest sectors. Life for him is a day to day struggle; Deice covets Strength, a trait that he lacks as far as anyone knows. In his visits to the neighboring nation of the Acumen Empire, a nation that covets knowledge, his life will get intertwined with a scientist on the wrong path. Together they will not only find answers to their own lives and secrets, but also uncover deeper secrets within their world of Gaia. As they do, they will witness first hand the extend to the Scars of Gaia.

Content Warnings:

-Mild Language: hell, damn/it, asshole

-Religious Themes (I intended no disrespect to religion but I could see how it's possible someone may take it that way. But I honestly did not intend for that to be the case)

-Mild Sexual situations? (There is the allusion to sex without actually depicting it)

-Some violence (There are sword fights, some death, some hunting depictions)

-There are a few disturbing moments in later chapters. Scenes of torture and dismemberment but I really tried not to be too graphic. But I can understand if even the mere mention could put someone off.



If this sounds interesting so far, you can find the first chapter here. And if reading this you’d like to go further, please contact me with a gmail address that you would like to use to access the Google Drive folder. I’m not looking for actual line editing, just general feedback and direction. What do you think works, what do you think doesn’t work and so on.

Thank you,

Robert

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